Losing a Friend

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Every stroke in this letter depicts a drop of tear
My heart searches so bad, but your place is no more on earth.
I really wish “the last time we saw” had come with a hint
I know some sights are blurry, but this one came with a tint.

You gave me a life time but didn’t even wait to see it begin
You promised to tell the story, and I held onto your words in belief.
I know you love adding value, but why did you add forever to your sleep?
You dared to turn the table, for I now tell the story of your demise.

I love that you’re down to earth, but not down beneath the earth
I love how you go far for your friends, but you’ve gone beyond the length.
I call your name with the expectation that you would say hello,
But to my greatest dismay, all I get back is echoes.

You may be far gone, but your memories will forever exist
I know it’s the last one, and I will forever cherish this gift.
My heart prays that the heavens rejoice at your entry
This is my confession that your death is a very painful exit.

-mide

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One response to “Losing a Friend”

  1. Dolapo Adigun. Avatar
    Dolapo Adigun.

    This is a deeply emotional piece with strong imagery and a clear sense of grief running through every line. The opening immediately sets the tone with “every stroke…drop of tear”, which effectively links writing to mourning, making the letter feel like both a tribute and a release of pain.

    What stands out is your use of contrast—life versus absence, memory versus silence. Lines like “you gave me a life time but didn’t even wait to see it begin” and “you’ve gone beyond the length” carry real emotional weight and show thoughtful wordplay around loss. The echo motif at the end is also powerful; it reinforces the feeling of unanswered calls and lingering presence.

    If there’s one area to refine, it’s clarity in a few places where the metaphors stack up quickly. Slight tightening in some lines would make the impact even sharper, because your core message is already strong and doesn’t need too many layers competing at once.

    Overall, it reads like a heartfelt elegy—raw, sincere, and expressive. It feels like something written not just to be read, but to be felt.

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